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10月9日SAT作文真题回顾 10月SAT作文题目 Is it better to adapt yourself to new circumstances, or is it better to just remain unchanged?(同学回忆版本) 题目翻译:是改变自己适应新环境,还是不改变自己(而改变环境)。 题目分析:本题是一个选择式的任务。任务要求考生能够二选一,并且能体现出为什么选前者而不是后者。 思考过程:根据例子提炼观点和正文例子逻辑。 1 想例子 笔者最喜欢的人物例子是美国自行车运动员Lance Armstrong,他在1996年被查出得了癌症,面对此新情况,他选择改变自己以前不听话的性格,去听从医生意见,和医护人员合作来克服癌症,适应这个新环境,最后成功并且复出夺得环法冠军。 2 提炼观点 观点是应该改变自己适应新环境,因为如果不改变,就可能会无法存活。 3 中间段例子逻辑 本文的题眼是:新环境——改变自己——结果较好(这样才能体现better) 所以整个例子的逻辑链是:曾经的Lance 很顽固,不听任何人的建议——后来得了癌症——改变自己的性格,变得比较cooperative——最后战胜癌症,取得环法冠军。 其中对于逻辑链的细节补充很重要,那么怎么知道这些细节呢?这就要大家提前做好对人物素材的整理,以便在考试时选择性使用。 4 细节补充 (此处资料取自笔者2010年上半年SAT作文回顾的文章) 1) 曾经的性格 He was stubborn. He didn’t understand the strategy of holding a little energy in reserve. First race: 1990 Amateur World Championship in Japan. The race, held on a very hot day, was 115 miles long with a difficult uphill section. Chris wanted Lance to draft--- to stay behind other riders and save some energy for the end of the race. But Lance didn’t listen to his coach. He was overconfident and quickly pedaled to a big lead. The lead grew to almost 90 seconds, but Lance was exhausting himself. He got tired and slowed down. His lead fell to a minute, than to 30 seconds. Soon the peloton had caught him. Lance couldn’t mount a charge at the end. He could only slide back into the draft and finish eleventh. 提示:之前完全不听教练的话。 Impatience was not Lance’s only problem during races. His aggressive style also got him into trouble. He didn’t give his opponents any respect. He would shout at them and insult them during races. He wouldn’t work with his own teammates. He would show them up(使难堪), just to prove that he was better. In response other riders sometimes got in his way on purpose and tried to slow him down. They rused to draft with him. By being selfish, Lance was isolating him. 提示:比较粗鲁,自大,不给对手尊重,不和队员合作。 2) 得癌症 At the age 25, the doctor Reeves said that he suffered testicular cancer. The cancer had spread from his testicle to his lungs. 3) 如何转变性格 <1> 听医生话做手术 Surgery to remove his testicle, three hours, success. Next three months, he need a powerful chemotherapy,, a kind of cancer treatment that can be very hard on the patient. <2> 同医生交流 Lance talked to his doctors about his treatment and hoped that they could use drugs that wouldn’t’t destroy his muscles or hurt his chance of returning to cycling someday. 4) 结果——成功 Finally, the whole therapy was over. The early tests were promising. After deep thought, he decided to start training again. He wanted to return for the 1998 season. More than that, he became the championship in Tour-de-France for the next seven years.
Amy GUO 经验: 16年 案例:4272 擅长:美国,澳洲,亚洲,欧洲
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